[留学论文润色]论文修改与润色案例

To take full advantage of my teaching skills, I started in October 1996 to teach English and other subjects at the primary school I attended when I was a child in October 1996. As the children I teach are were at the age when I studied herethere, I am was particularly sensitive to their needs and appreciative of their potential. Together with other teachers, I designed various training programs in calligraphy, art, writing, mental calculation, and English, programs that to combine learning with entertainment. The kids in my class are now learning more and faster thanks due to the entertainmentfun they find everyday in my programs. While kids can hardly learn well without being able to have the entertainmentfun, the lack of the entertainmentfun hurts more than the kids’ ability to learn. It can impair the kids’ emotional and psychological health to an extent. Entertainment is therefore part and parcel of what we teachers have to provide to children if we are want to help them grow up into productive members of the society.

As China’s education is oriented overwhelmingly towards helping kids pass exams, the teachers or principals do not attach much importance to the entertainment is about the least on the mind of an average teacher or principal. In the rush to produce super kids as measured by the grades out of exams, the purpose of education is lost all too often. The curriculum is limited to subjects covered by mandatory exams. Students are seldom encouraged to come up with original ideas. Interaction between teachers and students is kept at a minimum in the classroom. The teachers compete to heapassigned a large amount of homework on to the students, which made them feel very tired and gave them few opportunities to as do the parents. While everybody is tired to death, few kids get armed with the ability to take initiatives or solve real-world problems.

One of the ways to make a changes to the Chinese classroom is to utilize new technologies and media of teaching. School authorities in China, as those elsewhere, increasingly realized the importance of computerization, and many of the better-off schools in China are have already been stacked with state-of-the-art computers. But However, it is reported that reports say only a tiny fraction of those computers are have been adequately utilized. The situation withLet alone other educational technologies and media is no better. They are either absent from the school sitting or vastly under-used. Few Chinese teachers have acquired the know-howskills or the drive to make use of these modern facilities.

I therefore would like to pursue first a master ’s degree firstly and then a Ph. D. degree in instructional technology and media in the United States, where the use of modern educational facilities is undoubtedly the most advanced in the world. Judging by the information I have culled obtained from your, website, I think your institution is an American leaderinstitution leading in the research and studies of this field in the United States. I am anxious to study under the seasoned guidance of your distinguished faculty. I hope that , after I complete my advanced training in your program, I can be a much more effective teacher in China, one that sets an example for all other Chinese teachers after I complete my advanced training in your program.

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